AnimatedCritic's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Star Date 54321 Ep 03]

Feels like the beginning of something that could be pretty great, but it's really a one-off, one-joke piece, so in my personal opinion that joke should come much faster because it takes a little long to get there. Plus I feel like I'm seeing Spock get his fate for a bit too long.

Nice work on the voices too - not totally professional but captures the spirit - and the ship was pretty cool.

I'd like to see some more movement in the bodies, not just sliding across the screen. Also have you considered expanding this out, getting the crew to find Spock and go to battle with this monster? You could have a lot of fun and jokes with that. Also I believe it would be more engaging because now you have conflict and a story, and the viewer is going to want to know who wins.

Anyway, good work overall and would love to see what happens with an episode like this when it's really played out more fully.

marcustutt responds:

Thanks for the comment. I'm going to have to work harder on my next project. I'm still learning so, thank you for all the great advice.

[we watched fireworks]

Very nicely drawn and paced - great transitions as well! Reminds me a little of The Danish Poet, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iTef0HWbW_M

I'd love to see this expanded out, a full story of the great grandmother and the relationship, maybe how the relationship grows even as the woman is dying, could be an interesting contrast.
Only small critique is the shot going into the barn house, which I feel could be composed better.

Really excellent!

dylan responds:

"do you ever feel already buried deep
six feet under scream
but no one seems to hear a thing"

- beyoncé, 2010

[A Heart For Sweetie Belle]

Super-impressed that you are able to mimic the WB / Chuck Jones style so well.

It's either the playback or something, but the lip sync is consistently late 2-3 frames. That's pretty much my only criticism.

Nice drawing, nice style, fantastic facials. Really, really great!

Mel Blanc was so amazing - a great choice of VO (risky to cartoon another cartoon, but you've done it so well).

Pikapetey responds:

I think the audio shifted a little when I converted to this format. :-/

[Up in the Sky]

Really love how the characters' eyes tell the emotional content of what is going on. Such simple, non-moving drawings, yet I'm drawn in without all the fireworks.

Wondering what your aspect ratio is? 2:35? I don't usually see something this wide.

Story-wise, the only disappointing thing is that it seemed that the question of whether they (or he) got the monster should be resolved.

Music gets a little old and probably should have some contrast.

I'd also like to see greater contrast in the animation to emphasize each scenes' meaning.

Very nice work!

TheSilleGuy responds:

Thank you! The aspect ratio is 2560x1080. Also, yeah, I could have done a bit better but it was mostly due to time restraint that I couldn't. But still, thank you! :)

[KAFEEN]

Very nicely drawn and animated!

There is some inconsistency of style in various portions (esp. going toward the "cartoony" sad in the face at the end, which was derivative and deriving from the wrong source). Also, the meaning was not clear to me - I got it on a visceral level, but there was so much jumping around in imagery and idea that it was more of a smattering and less of a story.

Overall, very nice!

TaraGraphika responds:

Thank you!

I noticed my inconsistency and even if I could explained why, there should be no excuse as an animator. However, I will try to give in my inconsistency and create something out of it. As a story, it could, as many have mentioned, that It could sink in more that the meaning and its entire arc is understandable. Because, If one do not understand, then its no excuse and its a given that I failed to make it coherent. But, I will always accept clear criticism like this to help me understand in future projects. I thank you sir!

[PepperSweet 00]

I agree with the many who say you've done nice work visually - good shots and decent character work. I keep getting bumped up on the story; it's not intriguing to me that a girl would ask her boyfriend if he remembers how they met, and thus the story grows long because I didn't buy the premise. By the end, I'm a bit checked out, so I don't care if he remembers something different - it seems obvious they have no business being together at all.

But in spite of that, nicely done! The only thing I'd recommend in your motion is to watch the arcs - it's a bit jumpy overall.

Hope that helps!

CartoonCoffee responds:

Thanks for the review, I'll be keeping a close eye on my arcs for next time!

[Shrek Dies?]

Cute!

Some decent poses and nice drawings!

I'd watch the squash and stretch - the volume keeps changing.

Also lip sync is off in many spots.

Hope this is useful!

caleblemaster49 responds:

haha yah for some reason when I exported the flash files the sound would load faster than the video so everything was off by about a second. Trying to fix everything was a nightmare

[Puns...Animated!]

It feels a ilttle inexperienced but has a lot going for it. Voices are half-decent, drawings and backgrounds are simple and easy to understand.

Future suggestions: I'd try to think about movement between keyframes, even selecting one of the 12 animation principles (e.g., Ease in / ease out) and seeing if you can't carry it through the piece.

Also, there's no reason for these exact puns - I wish they meant something specifically to the characters so that the characters had a drama of their own.

Hope that's useful; would love to see more advanced work from you!

mPoon responds:

thanks for the encouraging feedback, this was something my friends and I joked around during a get together and we thought it would be cool to make an animation out of it. But now I'm working on a new animation that has more of a story line to it.

Your comments were definitely useful and I will take it into consideration for my next animation piece!

[Italiano]

Obvious skill in the drawing and animation; sometimes the animation didn't seem to know what to do (e.g., his movements on the bridge are a bit erratic).

Also some creative ideas, like the play on "Lady and the Tramp" ending up with his eating the other person.

It's kind of a single punchline drawn out too long. I'd love to see him get into danger, something like the progression in "Green Eggs and Ham" where the chase to give the man the meal brings them on a crazy adventure.

In this case, there's no rising action, so I tend to lose interest part way through.

Would love to see more of your work, and I hope these comments help!

KidneyJohn responds:

They do help because I do plan on making more of these.

[Dance, Skeleton]

Yeah, nice! Makes me go back immediately to the Disney version. Nicely done on the owl especially.

Would love to see more body movement on the skeleton - that's probably the next-level challenge!

Good luck and keep going!

JackSquatJB responds:

Yeah, I just wanted to get this out there. Had no idea it would make it to the front page! I'll be putting more effort in the future lol

And I had a lot of fun with the owl! Thanks for noticing!